Okay for creative writing class I had to make a 12 line poem, my teacher thought it was good but advised that we edited are pieces. Now if you please tell me what you think and if I could better it you'll be rewarded. Okay here it is:

Rain

Oh how I love the gentle rain,
Though it may mean that sadness nears,
Though it alone does not bring pain;
Falling from heaven like angels tears.
It falls with a morbid beauty,
Though man has made it into a sorrow,
So we grab our umbrellas and flee,
And animals retreat to their burrow'.
But I embrace each little pitter and patter,
As it cleanses us of our sin,
I stand there willingly in the storms center
To wash away who I have been.

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K thank you, now below is your reward

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Random pic I found